You have recently visited a local school in your community. It needs people who can help renovate the building and also do other jobs. Write a letter to the principal of the school and say: - how would you be able to help? - When and why would you do it? - Who will help you to do it?

Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to offer you help to renovate the
building. I got to know about
during my
visit to the
for some community service. My name is Tim Herry, and I am
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architect by profession. Preparing
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a building

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is my area of expertise, which I am sure can be useful in renovating the building.
, the
structure is very old now, and it requires strength testing of key support pillars.
it is not my forte, my younger brother can help in
regard. As I have taken a 2 months sabbatical from my work, I would be available for
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work all 7 days a week.
, I would be more than happy to offer my services free of cost because I was
the a
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student in
fifteen years back, and whatever I am today, the credit goes to
only. My younger brother and I work together as we both have expertise in
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. He is a civil engineer and can be of great help in
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the school's

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renovation project. Whenever you require any help, both of us will visit the
as we live nearby. I hope you will find our help useful and please
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hesitate to get in touch anytime to discuss it in detail. Yours faithfully, Tim Herry
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