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Scientists agree that people are damaging their health by eating too much junk food. Some people think that the answer to this problem is to educate people. Others think education will not work. Discuss both of them

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In recent years, regarding the serious problem that the excessive intake of
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food
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 does not lead to the
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 of
people
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, some maintain that it is due to not-efficient knowledge about
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food
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 while others believe it is not because of educational problems.
This
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, focusing on the opinion that it is due to insufficient education on
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 that
people
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 cannot keep their
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, in most cases, the vast majority of consumers are not knowledgeable about the negative aspects of
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food
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.
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 why public institutions have to enlighten
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 negative points to the mass.
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, they are able to deepen their understanding of negative influences which are caused by eating pizza or humbergar on their wholesome body. In Japan, the government has got success in enlightening the movement by demonstrating its risk on the remains.
On the other hand
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, the contention that their knowledge about
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 is relevant to their
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 is because of the in-nutrient
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 itself.
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 to say, eating
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such
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 as fried potatoes and onion rings entails degeneration of the wholesome body. It does not matter whether insight of nationalities is efficient or not in terms of nutrition. In conclusion, there are two opinions about the negative influence triggered by the enormous amount of
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food
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 on their
health
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: The former thinks
people
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 and government have to realize
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 impact and tell them drawbacks whilst the latter reckons that
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 the negative aspect is because of original nutrition of
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. In my opinion, it is true that what
people
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 do not know much about
food
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 is one of the reasons for their malicious
health
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.
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, it is
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 commonplace that
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food
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 has a negative influence on their
health
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. For these reasons, I am in favour of the former.

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