Fewer and fewer peoplewalk on a daily basis. What are the reasons and how to encourage them to spend their time

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It is certainly true that the importance of walking
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decreasing day by day
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very few
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health. It is a serious health issue it must be addressed immediately. In
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the causes and the possible necessary steps to solve the issue will be discussed. On the one hand, there are several possible causes behind
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lack of time. Many individuals are running a rat race competition in their
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and life so do not get enough time for
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urbanisation a plethora of private vehicles are available in our society. One advantage
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private transportation is very convenient and
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,there are several ways in which the problem can be solved. Begin with,public education is a necessary step that can create more awareness about the benefits of walking on
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classes ,seminars and social media explain the tremendous advantages of walking to
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, with the help of modern technologies like
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we can encourage the habit of walking. To conclude, in today's world more and more
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it can cause dramatic health issues.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • sedentary lifestyle
  • automation
  • public transportation
  • urban planning
  • pedestrian-friendly
  • safety concerns
  • pedestrian zones
  • public health campaigns
  • incentives
  • commuting
  • walkathons
  • physical and mental health
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