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Wealthy nations should assist poorer countries with humanitarian relief during natural disasters. Do you agree or disagree?

#nations #countries #relief #disasters
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It is argued that during a natural catastrophe, wealthy
countries
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 should
support
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 other impoverished
nations
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. In
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 essay, I agree with
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 statement because richer
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 have more experience and higher financial stability. The wealthy
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 often have more experience than other
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 because they used to face many situations and those experiences lead to protection strategies in their country.
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, Japan is one of the
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 that often faced natural disasters
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 as earthquakes that cause tremendous damage and losses of both construction and human resources for the past centuries,
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, the Japanese are able to understand the loss of other
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 the most.
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, they can provide instruction to the damaged
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 in order to help them recover faster, and allow them to have more protection in the future.
Countries
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 which are suffered from disasters from nature events often need financial
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 in order to help their population regain their stabilities. Most
countries
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 with higher financial positions are willing to give some of their
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 in the country’s reserve to help other
people
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. Recent research concludes that
people
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 who have earned more
money
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 are always looking forward to helping
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 who are in need as we saw large-scale companies often did charitable activities.
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,
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 who earn a limited amount of
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 are focused on managing their
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 by themselves. To conclude, it is undeniable and I am fully agreed that poorer
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 do need advice and
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 from prosperous
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 as those experience
countries
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 will provide effective practice and
support
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, and those
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 are
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 wealthy enough to financially
support
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 those injured
countries
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.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Humanitarian relief
  • Infrastructure
  • Global solidarity
  • Disproportionately
  • External assistance
  • Rebuilding efforts
  • Disaster response
  • Investment in stability
  • Dependency theory
  • Responsible intervention
  • Paternalistic
  • Shared humanity
  • Sovereignty
  • Capabilities
  • Fatality rates
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