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In some parts of the world it is becoming popular to research the history of one's own family. Why might people want to do this? Is it a positive or negative development?

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 the way which money was spent on various types of entertainment activities in the USA when compared to Europe and Asia in 1995 and 2000 is depicted in the given chart. Overall, it is clear that the money which Americans spent on entertainment was far higher than the two
regions
 in both
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years. As per the chart, publishing was the area where money was spent significantly in
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all the three
regions
 in both the years. In 2000, out of the total $257
billion
, the expenditure of Americans on publications was nearly $120
billion
, which was approximately $30
billion
 more than in 1995, when they spent a gross $184
billion
 on entertainment. The
next
 area of spending was on TV. In 1995, around 25 to 30
billion
 dollars were spent in Asia and Europe for
this
 purpose, while in the USA;
this
 was nearly $50
billion
. The spending proportions climbed in all the
regions
, with
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 having an exceptional growth to hit
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100
billion
 mark. Music, video and cinema were the areas where the spending was done comparatively less in these three
regions
 in both years at an average of 20 to 50
billion
 dollars. Of
this
, music was the most preferred, while cinema was the least preferred
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Genealogy
  • Heritage
  • Ancestry
  • Lineage
  • Descendants
  • Forebears
  • Pedigree
  • Dynasty
  • Progenitors
  • Ethnicity
  • Genetic predisposition
  • Familial ties
  • Archival records
  • Hereditary
  • Kinship
  • Self-identity
  • Patriarchy/Matriarchy
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