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Some people believe that the internet is used by all excessively. Do you agree this can have bad effect on children

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The
Internet
 is one of the most dangerous inventions because
people
use
 it a lot.From my point of I agree with
this
 ,statement
this
 can have a bad effect on offspring. There can be a lot of disadvantages for offspring in their future
life
.Everyone thinks the
internet
 is a benefit for searching for every invention but they don't think about their children.
To begin
 ,with
people
use
 a lot of
Internet
 in daily
life
 and always they keep doing something on the phone with the help of the
internet
. They don't care about anything happening from there said all the someone
people
use
 the
internet
 less and invent more
for instance
 in the time of Japan's 99% of
people
use
 to walk with the
Internet
 they do every work with the help of
internet
. They thought
life
 is nothing without the
Internet
 but one per cent of
people
 think without the
internet
life
 is successful. Every
people
 think is possible if there is no
internet
then
 the focus will be on working and we will continue to know about what's happening around us and
also
 every invention is possible without the
internet
. ,
Furthermore
, these can have a bad effect on little one because some children misuse the
internet
 they place games when their online classes are going on and
also
 still lingers in the eye of the parents
for example
 in the times of Corona in 2020 School conduct online classes, but some students attend the class and some attend class but they used to play the game with the screen of
therefore
 some children had
also
 become a victim of online games at the time and their eyes had become weak. To sum up. I strongly agree with
this
 statement due to
this
 movement can create more and more disadvantages for scion and
also
 for youngsters who
use
 useless.
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