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These days, more and more people prefer to use shared transport such as buses, trams or carsharing applications on their smartphones rather than driving their own cars. Do the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Lately, many
people
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 have started to prefer to
use
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 public
transportation
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instead
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 of driving private cars due to many reasons that will be discussed in the paragraph. Using public
transportation
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 has many advantages as it will decrease the traffic jam which is one of its reasons is the enormous increase in the number of private cars.
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, if most
people
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 had public
transportation
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, it will decrease the crowd in the streets.
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,
people
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 who
use
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 public
transportation
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 save a
lot
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 of money that could be lost on the fuel of the car.
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, the person who has a car spends about L.E 1000 on the fuel of the car,
however
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, if he used public
transportation
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 or started to get used to working he will save a
lot
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 of money and be more fit
On the other hand
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, if a
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 of
people
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 used shared
transport
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, they will be damaged quickly, especially if the
people
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 do not take care of what they
use
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.
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 as, there are new trains are uploaded on the railways, they do not spend a year and the chairs are broken and about 50% of the train is damaged.
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, if there is an epidemic, using shared
transport
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 will not be the best option because it will help a
lot
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 in spreading the disease.
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, while in Covid 19, many
people
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 avoided using shared
transport
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 and they walked for long distances to protect themselves from the disease. To be concluded, using shared
transport
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 is not a bad choice but it has disadvantages like everything in life. Every person chooses the option that has the least disadvantages for him. It is recommended to
use
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 shared
transport
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 except in those special cases.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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