Your local travel agent recommended a place to visit and you are now having a good time there. Write a letter to your travel agent and tell them the following: what you have been doing; what you hope to do before the end of your holiday; say why you like this place.
Dear Mr. Fujisata,
I am writing to you as promised in order to share my holiday at the Tori Gate Exposition.
Let me start by telling you which activities I attended, so far. Today, after having a wonderful time at the bonsai competition, I went to the archery area and, to my surprise, the sensei invited me to join her in a free-of-charge class.
Afterward
, she even lent me a beautiful traditional bow to take some photos with.
Prior to my vacation finishing, I am excited to visit the gardening class and see if I can participate in a beginner's class. As I mentioned previously, I have never had a green thumb, but after today I am feeling confident to give it a try and experience new things. Change the spelling
Afterwards
Furthermore
, I am hoping to take my first bonsai back home.
As to why I am so enthralled, it is because I admire these incredible people and their passion for their craft. Needless to say, their hard work regarding everything they do is something that is
going to make me go back home feeling deeply inspired.
Thank you again for your services.
Yours faithfully,
Amanda Lago.Submitted by amandacflago23 on
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