Your local travel agent recommended a place to visit and you are now having a good time there. Write a letter to your travel agent and tell them the following: what you have been doing; what you hope to do before the end of your holiday; say why you like this place.

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Dear Mr. Fujisata, I am writing to you as promised in order to share my holiday at the Tori Gate Exposition. Let me start by telling you which activities I attended, so far. Today, after having a wonderful time at the bonsai competition, I went to the archery area and, to my surprise, the sensei invited me to join her in a free-of-charge class.

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, she even lent me a beautiful traditional bow to take some photos with. Prior to my vacation finishing, I am excited to visit the gardening class and see if I can participate in a beginner's class. As I mentioned previously, I have never had a green thumb, but after today I am feeling confident to give it a try and experience new things.

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, I am hoping to take my first bonsai back home. As to why I am so enthralled, it is because I admire these incredible people and their passion for their craft. Needless to say, their hard work regarding everything they do is something

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going to make me go back home feeling deeply inspired. Thank you again for your services. Yours faithfully, Amanda Lago.

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Coherence and Cohesion

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 8.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 8.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 8.0

Complete response

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Appropriate word count

8 paragraphs

194 words

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Your local travel agent recommended a place to visit and you are now having a good time there. Write a letter to your travel agent and tell them the following: what you have been doing; what you hope to do before the end of your holiday; say why you like this place.

in some cities, people are choosing cars instead of bicycles, while in other cities riding bikes is which development do you think is better?replacing cars. why is this the case?

some people spend most of their time lives living close to where they born.what are the reasons and explain advantage and disadvantage

Some people think that poverty is the reason behind most crimes. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Some people think that spending a lot on holding wedding parties, birthday parties and other celebrations is just a waste of money. Others, however, think that these are necessary for individuals and the society. Discuss both views and give your opinion.