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Everyone should donate a fixed amount of their income to support charity. How far do you share this viewpoint?

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An increasing poverty rate in many countries causes charity operations to become considerably significant. It seems that devoting part of the wage to
charities
 is not worthwhile, and I will explain why in
this
 essay.
Firstly
, provided that all the
people
 were obliged to pay
money
 to
charities
, governments might ignore doing their duties to the poor and allocate their national sources for other inconsequential goals. Some authorities would ask their citizen to help the lower class of societies;
however
, they do not make any effective effort to contribute national wealth to their nation, which is their principal responsibility. The
second
 negative factor is that sometimes NGOs are not able to manage financial issues;
as a result
, they will not outlay
money
 on the needy.
For instance
,
charities
 hold ceremonies, spend lots of budgets, and waste them.
This
 leads us to the final, many
people
 do not have enough
income
 to dedicate a part of it to NGOs.
In other words
, sometimes, because of some events,
people
 have to overspend, and they will be under pressure to pay
money
 to
charities
.
For example
, it is necessary to disburse
income
 to repair the car after a terrible accident, so
income
 and expenses will be inconsistent. It is true that some believe
people
 must contribute to
charities
 because they identify the destitute correctly and support them. Despite
this
, most of the time, their opportunities are not successful. To conclude, because of the factors like governments' neglect of the poor, imbalance of
income
 and expenses, and NGOs' wrong
money
 management donating
income
 to
charities
 just by
people
 is not an appropriate solution.
Therefore
, governments should be obligated to devote a considerable budget to
charities
 and control their opportunities.
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