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Team activities can teach more skills to individual more than other activities ideally. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#team #activities #skills
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 a better and positive outcome, regardless of
one
's status and age. In
this
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 I will say that I totally agree with the statement that
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teamwork
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team
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work
 teaches more skills than handling it alone. When we talk about
team
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 it has to do with a group of individuals coming with different ideas , opinions ,
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informations
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 on research and
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 in other to achieve a common goal.
For example
, in Nigeria where
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 system has competitors
such
 as GLO network , Airtel and 9mobile, the aim of MTN employees will be how people will keep patronizing their company and more funds will be realized for
further
 projects.
therefore
, to avoid inconveniences everyone will come together as a
team
 with maximum cooperation and understanding in
other
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 to
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 their targets and achieve a common goal.
Team
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work
 creates opportunity in broadening
one
's knowledge,
Also
 gives room to express
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 and
thought
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,
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, there's
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an exchange
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 of knowledge , people will try to reason towards having a better standard. On the other side, handling
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activities alone makes
one
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look exhausted and its'
time consuming
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 because he or she will go into making more research in different forms before he
achieves
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 a particular goal.
Also
, the need to know more will be limited. Not that he would not get a better result but the time waste will be much. In conclusion,
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team
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a
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better
benefits
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 and has a higher advantage in promoting companies and
equiping
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equipping
one
 with more knowledge unlike an ideal kind of person who does everything alone without any help.
This
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 can affect mental health.
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