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In the future all cars, buses and trucks will be driverless. The only people travelling inside these vehicles will be passengers. Do you think the advantages of driverless vehicles outweigh the disadvantages?

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​In the
future
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 all
vehicles
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such
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 as cars, buses and trucks are unnecessary to have drivers.
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, there will be only the
passengers
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 inside these
vehicles
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. I assume that the benefits of
driverless
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vehicles
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 outweigh
than
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the drawbacks.
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, it is an excellent chance to save both
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energy
enery
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energy
 and
time
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 for
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a human
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human
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. And
then
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, not only the
driver
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 but
also
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 the
passengers
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 can have their private
time
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 if the
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driveless
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driverless
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 system is developed.
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, the
passengers
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 need to talk to the
driver
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 whenever he looks
like
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monotonous and sleepy. When there is no
driver
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 in the car, the
passenges
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passengers
passenger
 will have a chance to savour the moment. After that, they can feel the scenery of
the
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nature.
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, they can share their
time
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 with their friends or family by talking
small
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the small
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 talk and listening to
the
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music together.
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,
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driveless
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driverless
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vehicles
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 are safer,more comfortable and cost-effective than the
vehicles
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 which are essential to have drivers.
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, the health of the
driver
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 can change into a bad situation at any
time
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although
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 he may be
the
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 healthy person. When the
driverless
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 system is improved, the travellers do not need to be anxious about
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 case. And
then
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, they are satisfied enough to take a trip because travelling by
driverless
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vehicles
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are
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 cost-effective.
Subsequently
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, the
driver
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 may not know whether there is
slowdown
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a slowdown
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 on the road or not as opposed to the
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driveless
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driverless
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vehicles
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 can see clearly any obstacles in front of them.
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,
passengers
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 will feel more comfortable if they take a trip by
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driveless
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driverless
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vehicles
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. In conclusion, the
driverless
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 system will be improved in the future with many effective benefits.
As
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 the reasons that I mentioned above, I believe that the advantages of
driverless
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vehicles
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 are obviously more than the drawbacks.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • driverless vehicles
  • advantages
  • disadvantages
  • increased safety
  • reduced traffic congestion
  • improved efficiency
  • accessibility
  • disabled
  • elderly
  • job displacement
  • privacy concerns
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