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Some experts believe that it is better for children to begin learning a foreign language at primary schools rather than secondary school. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

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Some specialists consider that it is more effective for a child to study a foreign
language
 at a foundation level than in middle school education.The essay will suggest that the benefits overweigh the drawback.The descriptions
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this
 essay will be that the children who learn an additional
language
 before secondary level have more opportunities to become a master
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 both
languages
 and a kid’s cognitive
system
 develop well compared to other kids, as benefits.The primary disadvantage, the confusion with the native tongue , is not valid. It is obvious that there is a big difference between studying different kinds of
languages
 in the foundation year and secondary school year.The reason is that a kid can fluently speak like a native speaker if he only
learn
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 a
language
 before the
age
 of 10.According to the raw RT different scores,starting the
first
 step of learning from an early
age
 can show the strongest learning effect.
Moreover
,the child who has already learnt in the early years may be more convenient in the future as he studied early.
Then
, the improvement of the cognitive
system
; oriented toward human skills and capabilities, can be seen.Learning from
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 early
ages
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 can provide
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 positive
effective
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 on brains.Many
researches
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types of research
pieces of research
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 prove that the development of
cognitive
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system
 occurring in the
age
 between 4-7 years
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 a huge influence on a child’s life.It
also
show
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 that learning
languages
 and new
vocabularies
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 are the necessities to improve that
system
. The main drawback,
complication
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 with the native tongue becomes one of the considerations in
this
 topic.But it must be declared due to many reasons.
Although
 many people may think that a pupil who is trying to become bilingual or polyglot at
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 young
age
 can confuse between
languages
,there is no clear and distinct evidence to
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.
Furthermore
, my nephew who is
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bilingual
of
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 English and Burmese can speak both of them clearly and fluently.Actually, he started studying them at the
age
 of and he is now 13 years old.I have never seen
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his conversations are
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blend
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.So, in accordance with the above reasons,the uncertainty with
mother
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language
 cannot be happened and must be strongly refused that downside. .
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Cognitive development
  • Enhance
  • Problem-solving skills
  • Pronunciation
  • Mimic
  • Native-like accent
  • Cultural awareness
  • Sensitivity
  • Exposure
  • Resource allocation
  • Qualified
  • Effective instruction
  • Overwhelmed
  • Curriculum
  • Undermining
  • Mother tongue
  • Prioritizing
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