Young people who commit serious crimes, such as rubbery or a violent attack should be punished in the same way as adults. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

It is undeniable that there are more and more
crimes
committed by young
people
and have bad influences on society. To solve
this
growing problem, an escalating category of
people
, nowadays, tries `to seek solutions and some of them think those young
criminals
should be punished like
adults
.
By contrast
, I discern young offenders should be educated and punished less. In the following essay, my contention will be
further
scrutinized.
To begin
with, it is widely known that compared to
adults
, young
people
have immature minds and bodies so
this
is more like a moral problem rather than a legal issue. In most juvenile cases, because of a bad growing environment and lack of education, those young
criminals
have no consciousness of laws and do not know where is the boundary of legal which means they even do not realize
that
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they have committed. So if they are punished like
adults
, it can have a serious impact on their physical and mental health and they will breed more evil thoughts. When they are released from prison, it is likely for them to commit
crimes
again.
Therefore
, in order to solve
this
issue, a law trial is no longer the most useful weapon.
By contrast
, more morals should be added and more legal publicity is
also
important.
Furthermore
, young offenders should be given
second
chance. To illustrate
this
, in many countries, there are many kinds of laws to protect minors.
For instance
, in China, young
criminals
are sent to juvenile prison rather than staying with adult
criminals
who can teach them more criminal techniques.
However
, in juvenile prison, they can get an education. The living condition is much better in the meantime. In
this
way, they can turn over a new leaf in their lives.
Thus
, as long as young offenders are educated well and punished just the right amount, they will be grateful to the public and thankful for the government giving them a
second
chance to go back to normal society.
In addition
, a more tolerant society leads to less crime. In conclusion, after
this
essay has manifested the above-mentioned points, I can reiterate that I believe that young
people
who commit serious
crimes
should not be punished like
adults
. They should be educated and given a
second
chance. As not only is good for their mental and physical health, but it can
also
reduce
crimes
in the future.
Hence
, I argue that governments should implement more laws to protect young
criminals
and the public should
also
treat those young
people
equally.
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