You are in a hospital with a broken leg.Your colleagues have sent you get well soon greeting cards and gifts.Write a letter to them and include : Thank them for everything Explain how you spend time in the hospital Inform them about your recovery process

Dear Mr Andy, I'm so glad to receive the cards and gifts from you and other colleagues. I really like the flower which Judy bought for me
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because it smells so good even
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have no idea what kind of flower it is.
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, thank you for collecting the greeting cards from my colleagues. Sometimes I played
guitar
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to cheer the patient in the same room
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me. I don't have a chance to play video games, and I used the time well to play Minecraft when I was in the hospital.
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, I found out
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really good
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tv show during the break. It is called Game of Thron, and I was so
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it. I still need to rest a bit in the hospital, and I'm getting better now. I'm trying to make myself
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move around in the room as
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daily exercise.I hope you and other colleagues are doing well even without me. Yours Sincerely, Peter
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

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To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

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Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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