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In the future all cars, buses and trucks will be driverless. The only people travelling inside these vehicles will be passengers. Do you think the advantages of diverless vehicles outweigh the disadvantages.

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The trials that have been carried out recently on driverless vehicles, may have aroused various opinions around it. As far as I am concerned, the merits of having
such
 kind of transportation overcome the demerits, as will be illustrated in the following paragraphs.
To begin
 with, having no driver is a great step to
elevate
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 the safety margin for several reasons.
Firstly
, it eliminates human error which is the main reason for car crashes according to statistics.
Secondly
, the newly manufactured cars under testing, use age-cutting technology. That means more advanced and protective measures will be included,
for instance
, airbags and sensors.
Thirdly
, no chance for crimes committed by private drivers
such
 as Uber or Taxi drivers.
Hence
, families may feel comfortable
to send
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 their youngsters to their schools or activities anytime on their own.
Furthermore
, it is a time-saving tool! Undoubtedly, sitting in the passenger seat while a robot is doing the job, will allow us to do things that we struggle to do during the day.
For example
, making important phone calls, reading, watching videos, or even just relaxing. On top of that, we can travel overnight and sleep safely without stressing about the road.
Moreover
, relying on e-maps and the ability of the car’s system to follow the right route, will lower the probability of getting lost and taking
longer
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 time to reach the destination. In conclusion, I believe that introducing these vehicles to the market , has magnificent advantages, as long as other factors,
such
 as
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 safety measures, are taken into consideration.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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