The three pie charts show the changes in annual spending by a particular school in 1981, 1991, and 2001.

The three pie charts show the changes in annual spending by a particular school in 1981, 1991, and 2001.
The pie charts show the total school spending in 30
years
,from 1981 to 2001 in 10
years
intervals in 5 aspects------Other workers’
salaries
,
insurance
,teachers’
salaries
,resources,furniture and equipment.
It is clear that
teachers’
salaries
were always the largest
cost
in
this
period,
whereas
the
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insurance
kept being the smallest one.
Besides
,the change in other workers’
salaries
is the biggest. In 1981,The teachers’
salaries
account for 40 per
cent
of the spending,which is 20 times larger than
insurance
.After 10
years
,teachers’
salaries
increased by 10 per
cent
in the spending and dominated half of the
cost
.In 2001,the
cost
decreased a little to 45 per
cent
,but it still exceed others and it is about 6 times
of
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insurance
spending. The other 3 kinds of spending changed a lot.
Cost
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The cost
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of other workers’
salaries
kept shrinking,
from28
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from 28
per
cent
to 15 per
cent
,
also
its ranks dropped from No.2 to No.3.Spending on resources increased
i
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in
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the first 10
years
,but it fall
then
,even lower than the beginning data.Spending on furniture and equipment dropped first,
while
in 2001,it soar 18 per
cent
,which is the largest increase in
the
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30
years
.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words years, salaries, insurance, teachers’, cost, cent with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "show" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • annual spending
  • budget allocation
  • educational expenses
  • financial distribution
  • percentage
  • increase/decrease in spending
  • significant change
  • expenditures
  • comparison
  • trend
  • category
  • shift
  • saw a rise/fall
  • investment
  • allocation
  • predominant
  • minor
  • resources
  • prioritize
  • fiscal policy
  • capital outlay
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