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In some countries young people have little leisure time and are under a lot of pressure to work hard in their studies. What do you think are the causes of this ? What solution can you suggest

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Nowadays, young students only have less free
time
 in their daily life. Since they spend a lot of
time
 on studies.
This
 situation is becoming common in present society, there are some factors that result in it and I will give my own suggestions. Today, young students have less and less free
time
 in their daily lives, because they spend a lot of
time
 studying.
This
 situation is becoming more and more common in today's society. There are some factors that cause
this
 phenomenon. I will give my own advice.
First
 of all,
parents
 worry too much about their
children
’s future, so they always manage various
courses
 on their
children
's daily schedules. Especially, in Asian countries, Asian
parents
 always want their
children
 to learn different skills,
thus
 they attempt to manage many talented
courses
 for them.
Then
children
 spend their off-school
time
 and weekends going to these
courses
. It causes students to not have enough
time
 to relax.
Secondly
, an employment environment makes
people
 live in a high competition environment, where the workers have to learn more skills and knowledge.
For example
, in Taiwan, the designers not only need to design and be creative ability but
also
 edit videos ability. The employees need to take some
courses
 to keep improving their abilities, to prevent them from being eliminated from employment. To change
this
 situation,
people
 can use some methods. For Asian
parents
, they should change their ideas and not focus their
children
 on extra learning in their free
time
. All
people
 need to properly release pressure from school and work, so
parents
 should leave
time
 for
children
 to relax.
Additionally
, employees can use online to learn more skills for a job, they can have
courses
 anytime and anywhere and they save their
time
 doing their hobbies. In conclusion, modern
people
 live under pressure. If
people
 do not know how to reduce their pressure, it might make
people
 have an unhealthy mentality.
People
 should be more concerned about their mental health.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • high expectations
  • academic success
  • future success
  • competitive nature
  • modern education systems
  • top grades
  • prestigious universities
  • high-paying jobs
  • rise of technology
  • social media platforms
  • physical activities
  • relaxation
  • extracurricular demands
  • multiple responsibilities
  • economic factors
  • lower-income families
  • part-time jobs
  • academic pressures
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