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It is important to study the literature of their own country than of other countries. Do you agree or disagree with this?

#study #literature #country #countries
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knowledge
 of other
languages
 wouldn't be a negative one . The study of literature has to do with patience and concentration. Some
people
 think it's important to study their
countries
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language
to
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others.
If
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 am to say ,
firstly
, having
a
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knowledge
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knowledge
 about your country's
language
 where you are born and breed-up is part of the basic foundation and identity.
consquently
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consequently
,
boarden
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broaden
 of
knowledge
 is pivotal in the horizons of life. No
knowledge
 is a waste if am to say. Learning other
people
's
language
 will strengthen communication amongst
people
especially
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 during
business
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the business
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.
For example
 , during export and import exchange of
products
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,products
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 most
people
finds
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 it difficult to understand their co associate's
language
this
 will lead to spending more fund to
employe
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 an interpreter.
Furthermore
, knowing other
languages
besides
 your own improves the economy of the country because buying and selling with foreigners will generate funds for the societies.
Also
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 it will welcome development in various countries
such
 as good infrastructures, and
use
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the use
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 of various modern
device
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devices
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.
Furthermore
, It could save one from danger.
For
example
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 a white man who
embaks
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embarks
 on a journey to a local base area and has no
knowledge
 about their native
language
 could be trapped by dangerous
people
 knowing that he is a novice. Learning various
language
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languages
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 provides opportunities for
people
 to seek and find
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a job
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job
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jobs
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 in other cities. It enhances cultures and traditions in various
aspect
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aspects
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 of life. In conclusion, knowing varieties of
languages
 and that
of
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ones'
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one's
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 own is of great
benefits
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benefit
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 to everyone in terms of interaction ,migration ,
businesses
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business
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 and marriage.
Also
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 different
languages
signifies
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people
's
identify
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identity
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 just like the Igbos, Yorubas and Hausas have their own
languages
.
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