Some people say the most important thing about being rich is helping other people. To what extent do you agree or disagree ?

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Nowadays, So many
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want to make a gift, especially to underprivileged
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. They want to contribute to the public or charitable for helping other
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.
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essay is to discuss the possible reasons of agree or disagreeing with my own views.
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agreement, according to some surveys, 50% of Hong Kong’s population lives below the
poverty
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line. Being rich can help other poor
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it helps eradicate
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. The richest
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can let pass the poor
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, brings back them to be protecting, healthy living, establish their self-esteem overcome the
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problem. To suggest,
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can be a
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,
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is the quickest and easiest obviously to help the world’s
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become a donate
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.
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, some of the restaurant bosses become food angels, who assisted the service to distribute the free meal to poor
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.
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disagreement, for
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instant, many
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who attempt to donate to
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believe it's important to help
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in need. They feel that
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should give to others because it's the right thing to do.
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, for
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point, many
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organizations by developed. Rich
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would donate a lot of amounts to these organizations per year. But, the productiveness of these
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companies includes many kinds of outcomes
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as advertisement, and management that money directly to be unknown.
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, not only being rich can help other
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also
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they not be wealthy.
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, Mother Teresa fully supported a lot of poor
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in the world
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of financial benefits.
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, obviously, help-orientation priority is executive from heart and body.
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, financial help is not fulfilling at all. The volunteer is most suitable to support the medical care after the earthquake,
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deliver food after the war place is equally claimed overweight to being rich. In conclusion, to according some
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think the majority is to become wealthy
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then
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help to underprivileged. I opined it is not important to the helpful successful way. Body support and help to suffering
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in society, including spreading love and care are totally better than financial help. My hope is the government can step into solving the wealthy and poor gap and assist the poor
people
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to become normal life.
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