Some people say the most important thing about being rich is helping other people. To what extent do you agree or disagree ?

Nowadays, So many
people
want to make a gift, especially to underprivileged
people
. They want to contribute to the public or charitable for helping other
people
.
This
essay is to discuss the possible reasons of agree or disagreeing with my own views.
Firstly
agreement, according to some surveys, 50% of Hong Kong’s population lives below the
poverty
line. Being rich can help other poor
people
it helps eradicate
poverty
. The richest
people
can let pass the poor
people
, brings back them to be protecting, healthy living, establish their self-esteem overcome the
poverty
problem. To suggest,
people
can be a
charity
,
this
is the quickest and easiest obviously to help the world’s
poverty
become a donate
charity
.
Besides
, some of the restaurant bosses become food angels, who assisted the service to distribute the free meal to poor
people
.
Secondly
disagreement, for
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instant, many
people
who attempt to donate to
charity
believe it's important to help
people
in need. They feel that
people
should give to others because it's the right thing to do.
Therefore
, for
this
point, many
charity
organizations by developed. Rich
people
would donate a lot of amounts to these organizations per year. But, the productiveness of these
organization's
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companies includes many kinds of outcomes
such
as advertisement, and management that money directly to be unknown.
However
, not only being rich can help other
people
also
they not be wealthy.
For example
, Mother Teresa fully supported a lot of poor
people
in the world
instead
of financial benefits.
Therefore
, obviously, help-orientation priority is executive from heart and body.
Furthermore
, financial help is not fulfilling at all. The volunteer is most suitable to support the medical care after the earthquake,
also
deliver food after the war place is equally claimed overweight to being rich. In conclusion, to according some
people
think the majority is to become wealthy
people
then
help to underprivileged. I opined it is not important to the helpful successful way. Body support and help to suffering
people
in society, including spreading love and care are totally better than financial help. My hope is the government can step into solving the wealthy and poor gap and assist the poor
people
to become normal life.
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