Many manufactured food and drink products contain high levels of sugar, which causes many health problems. Sugary products should be made more expensive to encourage people to consume less sugar. Do you agree or disagree?

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Sugar
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is an integral part of our lives and in our daily food
such
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as bread, candies,
cakes
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and cakes
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,…
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, the government should raise the prices of sugary
products
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in order to prevent customers from using too much
sugar
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. As far as I concerned, I
am totally disagree
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with the view and
a
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an
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increasing cost is not appropriate.
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with, levying high
price
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prices
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in
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on
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sugary
products
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would cause
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apply
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hunger for the poor. In some cases, the poverty needs to buy sweet foods like juice, milk and usually contain
sugar
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in it in order to maintain a full of nutrition eating
and
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sugar
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is
also
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shown to store energy for the body and put sweet foods in
people
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, you feel indeed improve your mood and comfortable.
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, office workers run out of energy after a
day
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day's
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work, they need to eat
snack
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snacks
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or candies that contain
sugar
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to retrieve strength. The
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reason why
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issue is disapproved
upon
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apply
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is that we could see that there are plenty of
people
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still
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who still
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buy sugary
products
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in spite
inspite
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in spite
of high prices. Sweet-
addictors
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addiction
just too
much
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apply
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passionate
to
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about
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sugary food so they will spend their money getting what they want by all means.
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, we can see that there is no help when wine and
cigarette
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cigarettes
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are sold at high prices that
people
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still buy
at
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for
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a huge amount.
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, it will make a lot of profit for the seller who
want
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wants
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to take advantage of
high
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a high
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price but low value. The
last
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issue worth mentioning
in
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is
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the
tge
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the
fact that the extra cost
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of
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sugary
products
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will not
as
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be as
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effective as
the
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raising awareness in public. Since
,
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they
cam
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can
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determined
determine
determind
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determine
the
quantity
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number
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of sweet foods
depend
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depends
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on individual demand to have a healthy diet. In conclusion, I believed that
the
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expensive sugary food will not affect
to
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apply
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the
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consumption
in
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the eating habit. From that point,
people
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need to have more knowledge to regulate
the
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their
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sugar
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level
for
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to
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suitable
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a suitable
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extent of their body.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • health problems
  • manufactured food and drink products
  • sugary products
  • excessive sugar consumption
  • discourage
  • promote
  • healthier choices
  • reduce
  • increased taxes
  • fund
  • health education
  • prevention programs
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