Many manufactured food and drink products contain high levels of sugar, which causes many health problems. Sugary products should be made more expensive to encourage people to consume less sugar. Do you agree or disagree?

Sugar

is an integral part of our lives and in our daily food

such

as bread, candies,

cakes

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and cakes

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,…

However

, the government should raise the prices of sugary

products

in order to prevent customers from using too much

sugar

. As far as I concerned, I

am totally disagree

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with the view and

a

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an

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increasing cost is not appropriate.

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with, levying high

price

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prices

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in

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on

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sugary

products

would cause

the

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apply

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hunger for the poor. In some cases, the poverty needs to buy sweet foods like juice, milk and usually contain

sugar

in it in order to maintain a full of nutrition eating

and

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apply

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sugar

is

also

shown to store energy for the body and put sweet foods in

people

, you feel indeed improve your mood and comfortable.

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, office workers run out of energy after a

day

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day's

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work, they need to eat

snack

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snacks

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or candies that contain

sugar

to retrieve strength. The

second

reason why

this

issue is disapproved

upon

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apply

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is that we could see that there are plenty of

people

still

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who still

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buy sugary

products

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in spite

inspite

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in spite

of high prices. Sweet-

addictors

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addiction

just too

much

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apply

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passionate

to

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about

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sugary food so they will spend their money getting what they want by all means.

For instance

, we can see that there is no help when wine and

cigarette

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cigarettes

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are sold at high prices that

people

still buy

at

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for

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a huge amount.

Therefore

, it will make a lot of profit for the seller who

want

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wants

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to take advantage of

high

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a high

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price but low value. The

last

issue worth mentioning

in

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is

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the

tge

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the

fact that the extra cost

in

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of

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sugary

products

will not

as

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be as

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effective as

the

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raising awareness in public. Since

,

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they

cam

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can

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determined

determine

determind

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determine

the

quantity

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number

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of sweet foods

depend

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depends

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on individual demand to have a healthy diet. In conclusion, I believed that

the

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expensive sugary food will not affect

to

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apply

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the

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consumption

in

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of

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the eating habit. From that point,

people

need to have more knowledge to regulate

the

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their

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sugar

level

for

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to

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suitable

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a suitable

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extent of their body.