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Although countries with long average working hours are economically successful, this often has some negative consequences. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

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It is often argued that the nations where people spend extra while on jobs are ahead of others in terms of economy. Despite its enormous benefits,
this
 attitude of overworking bears harms too.
Thus
, I
also
 believe that there must be a limit to the maximum working hours and completely agree with a similar school of thought.
To begin
 with, worktime should never be the criterion to judge a country's economic power. Other factors like hard endeavour, manpower and intellect
also
 play a vital role in making the country, monetarily supreme. To illustrate, take an example of the Japanese nation, where duty timings are fixed and yet they are leading the world in the field of technological progress.
Nevertheless
, just giving more emphasis to the job cannot be a measurement of success. Another argument I put forth is that, over
time
 at duty does always result in exhausted workers no matter what.
Therefore
, after a certain amount of
time
, persistent results cannot be taken from the said employees.
For instance
, a cashier employed at a bank would not be expected to give the same amount of work done during later hours compared to what he was delivering in the morning.
As a result
, there would be more chances of errors by a physically tired person and
consequently
 less productivity gradually.
On the other hand
, it is said that those nations are surely successful where work is taken too seriously and it is their prime priority of them.
Additionally
, "All work and no play makes Jack a dull boy" was the proverb said for
this
 mindset. Surely, giving more
time
 to a job gives benefits to society and the individuals as earnings can be enhanced by overwork but not for a longer period of
time
.
For example
, the doctors in the US are working almost 6 days a week and
also
 earning a lot but the workload is putting them into a vicious cycle of deprivation of social life, sleep and
time
 with family.
As a result
, fewer people adopt the profession and
hence
, a shortage of medical professionals in the country. In conclusion,
although
 countries with comparatively more duty hours are apparently successful with stable economies ,I do not agree with the heinous idea of humans becoming all-
time
 working robotics.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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