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Some people believe that nowdays we have too many choices. To what extend do you agree or disgree?

#people #nowdays #choices #disgree
Decisions made by
people
depends
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 on their strength. On one hand, few
people
 think that they have many options but
on the other hand
, some believe it is better to have
less
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 options. It depends on human thinking. In
this
 essay, I will illustrate
the
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both sides of
above
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 statement.
To begin
 with, It is tremendous to have many
choices
 in
a
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life
. These are created by
people
 who want to be an expert in their
life
. Many options are made by idea generations. By choosing the right choice get more benefits. Due to advanced technology,
people
 at any age can learn anything.
For example
, providing virtual classes is beneficial for everyone.
People
 from different places can learn new things like cooking, dancing, etc. by staying
at
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 their comfort places. Some
people
 feel that they are unsuitable
in
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 their job,
then
 they can switch to their comfort zone by choosing
right
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 choice.
On the other hand
, some
people
 think that, having many
choices
 in
life
also
 a decline.
By choosing
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 wrong decisions it leads to
waste
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 of time.
People
 should think carefully while taking crucial
choices
 to build their
life
. To sum up, having
wide
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 variety of
choices
 brings many advantages.
People
 should consider it as an inevitable outcome of the development of
the
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modern society and they should use it properly.
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