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The system used for rubbish/garbage collection in your local area is not working properly. This is causing problems for you and your neighbours. Write a letter to the local council. In your letter • describe how the rubbish collection system is not working properly( height and not enough capacity • explain how this is affecting you and your neighbours ( smell and mosquites , spred illness • suggest what should be done about the problem(arrnage the biiger size

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to express my dissatisfaction regarding the
garbage
 bin which is not working properly in our community. First of all, the
garbage
 collector has
long
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a long
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 height so it is difficult
to
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for
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 people to reach over there and dump the
garbage
.
Thus
, local people put the
grabage
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garbage
 outside
instead
 of putting
inside
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it inside
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 the bin. Aside from
this
 , the carrying capacity
which
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apply
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is not enough to store the whole
community
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community's
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 rubbish.
Due to outside
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Outside
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garbage
 bags ,
they
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apply
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evoke a disgusting smell , which makes
unable
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them unable
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 to take a breath.
Moreover
,
mosquoties
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mosquitoes
are gather
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are gathered
are gathering
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 over there and spread a lot of ailments , which are not only affected the older but
also
 the children more frequently. I kindly request you to
arrnage
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arrange
the
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a
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 bigger size
garbage
 bin , which will have
high
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a high
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 volume and the dump truck has to empty the
garbage
 every week rather than biweekly. Thank you for your attention
this
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to this
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 matter. I look forward to your prompt response. Yours Faithfully, Jass
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coherence cohesion
Improve the logical structure by organizing sentences clearly. Some sentences can be rephrased to enhance clarity, such as 'people ... dump the garbage' to 'people find it difficult to reach the garbage bin due to its height, leading to garbage being left outside.'
task achievement
Ensure the complete response by providing more detailed descriptions or examples. For instance, describe specific incidents or community views on the issue.
task achievement
Used an appropriate and polite tone for formal letter writing, which is essential for effective communication with the local council.
coherence cohesion
Closing with 'Yours Faithfully' is correctly used when the letter starts with a generic 'Dear Sir or Madam.'
coherence cohesion
Each paragraph introduced a new idea in a coherent manner, helping the reader follow your line of thinking. This helps improve overall readability.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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