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Some people spend most of their lives living close to where they are born. Reason? Advantages and disadvantages

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It is seen that some
people
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 spend most of their life span in the
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 where they are born for. They want to keep reviving their childhood memories and always want to be close to their culture and traditions. There are many pros and cons to
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person
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's behaviour. I shall be discussing those in the following paragraphs.
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, a
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 always wants to attach to their roots, reminding them about their culture. Nobody likes to leave their family at any age. In fact, once the child's school has started, everyone likes to continue from the same space. No one agrees to change the location as it could affect the child's study. So
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 leads to most of the time spent in where the
person
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 was born.
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, I was born in Moga city. I never got a chance to live outside my city because of my studies during my childhood.
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, a
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 knows other
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 living in that community since birth, so they are in their comfort zone with all those surrounding them. The Primary benefit of spending the major part of life in the same area is family care and attachment. Parents make a kid a responsible citizen as they are the ones who know their child's temperament. Children learn to respect their elders while living with them.
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, I have seen kids who are living far away from their parents, they do not bother to respect the elder ones. On the other ,side there are disadvantages too, the main drawback is a
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 will not learn new things by staying at
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 same
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. He would not be confident in life and cannot succeed. To illustrate, I have seen
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 who use to change their living timely are more succeded and more confident. So, in fact, for the better ,opportunity a
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 has to move to another
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. Some places are not meant for all
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. To put it in a nutshell. I pen down saying that spending time at birth
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 has advantages in terms of love and affection but if we have to succeed
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 moving to another
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 is mandatory.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Migration
  • Settlement
  • Hometown
  • Roots
  • Community
  • Emotional attachment
  • Sense of familiarity
  • Social network
  • Bond
  • Safety
  • Proximity
  • Support system
  • Heritage
  • Limited options
  • Risk aversion
  • Adaptability
  • Comfort zone
  • Unfamiliarity
  • Exploration
  • Adventurous spirit
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