We are living in a society which makes us believe that we can reach everything we want
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if we only try hard enough.
is brought to us by the media and the entertainment industry and is especially widespread among
. Despite the fact, that
of thinking might have a positive impact on them there are
drawbacks to
attitude.
essay will examine the advantages and disadvantages of the ‚everything is possible mentalitymentality‘ and will provide a logical conclusion.
Starting by looking at the advantages, one major plus point is that
of thinking leads to a positive attitude in
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minds, especially when dealing with difficult tasks. It will help them to stay strong and to keep
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faith, even though they are afraid to fail. Take a young girl, who just started practising riding a bike as an example. As
girl had never ridden a bike before, she is very miserable in it
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and might stumble and fall very often. These failures and mistakes will prove themself as very motivating to her and might even up in result
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she
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to give up. But if she was trained to have a positive
about it she won't give up and reach her goal eventually .
,
of thinking, despite the actual outcome, is in some situations the only
to continue working
.
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believing that they can reach something which there will actually never be able to achieve out of personal or financial reasons
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And
will have a negative Impact on the Child's self-esteem and mental health. For ,
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will a little boy who has absolutely no talent for singing never ends up being the
superstar. ,
will
little boy continue practising and maybe even participating in contests and performances, because he is assured of his talents. After ,
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he will sooner or later learn, the hard
, that society thinks differently
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a public negative critic or laughter.
To sum up, there are both positives and negatives to the
that
can achieve everything they set their mind to if they just work hard enough. In my
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of thinking is beneficial for many
as it set up a strong motivation and willpower.
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unfortunately not match
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every situation and
might just end up in frustrations, low self-esteem and depression.
is it important to teach
what is and what is not likely to be achieved
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