We are living in a society which makes us believe that we can reach everything we want
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  if we only try hard enough. 
  is brought to us by the media and the entertainment industry and is especially widespread among 
. Despite  the fact, that 
  of thinking might have a positive impact on them there are 
 drawbacks to 
 attitude. 
 essay will examine the advantages and disadvantages of the ‚everything is possible mentalitymentality‘ and will provide a logical conclusion.
Starting by looking at the advantages, one major plus point is that 
  of thinking leads to a positive attitude in 
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  minds, especially when dealing with difficult tasks. It will help  them to stay strong and to keep 
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  faith, even though they are afraid to fail. Take a young girl, who just started practising riding a bike as an example. As 
 girl had never ridden a bike before, she is very miserable in it
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  and might stumble and fall very often. These failures and mistakes will prove themself as very motivating to her and might even up in  result 
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 she 
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  to give up. But if she was trained to have a positive 
 about it she won't give up  and reach her goal eventually . 
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  of thinking, despite  the actual outcome, is in some situations the only 
 to continue working  
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  believing that they can reach something which there will actually never be able to achieve out of personal or financial reasons
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  And 
 will have a negative Impact on the Child's self-esteem and mental health. For ,
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  will a little boy who has absolutely no talent for singing never ends up being the 
  superstar. ,
 will 
 little boy continue practising and maybe even participating in contests and performances, because he is assured of his talents. After ,
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  he will sooner or later learn, the hard 
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  a public negative critic or laughter. 
To sum up, there are both positives and negatives to the 
 that 
 can achieve everything they set their mind to if they just work hard enough. In my 
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 of thinking is beneficial for many 
 as it set up a strong motivation and willpower. 
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 every situation and 
 might just end up in frustrations, low self-esteem and depression. 
 is it important to teach 
 what is and what is not likely to be achieved
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