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You live in a room in college which you share with another student. However there are many problems with this arrangement and you find it very difficult to work. Write a letter to accommodation office at the college. In the letter, - Describe the situation - Explain your problem and why it is difficult to work - Say what kind of accommodation you would prefer.

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Dear Sir Madam, I am writing
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 letter to inform you
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 of the problems I found
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 the dormitory
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, where I am sharing with another student. Before I explain the current situation, I would like you to know that I have no intention to make any personal attack and I am simply telling you what I have experienced. By far I find the situation is very fragile and it is very hard to deal with him.
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 of foremost, my roommate made so much noise quite a few times and it seems that he did not want to change even though I requested him so many times not to make
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, he brought his guest very often while I kept complaining to him not to bring anyone anyhow without letting me know prior.
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, he has no discipline at all and the
room
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 is a mess. All of these problems always contracts me from my study and I am extremely worried if I can do well in the
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 coming exam. Apparently, sharing the
room
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 with
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 type of colleague is not really comfortable
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 me.
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request
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 single
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 if there is any available in the college. May I request you please
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consider
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top
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 priority and let me know as early as possible because the exam is around the corner and I need
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 high score indeed in
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 test
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 Sincerely, Chris
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