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Topic: a great city should not be confounded with a populous one. Discuss the above statement and give your own opinion

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A great city not necessarily is a populous one, since a small town can be more comfortable and calmer.
Nevertheless
, a big city is full of
activities
 and possibilities.
Therefore
, while I agree that villages can be enjoyable to live in, only populous metropolia are called great by me personally. The main reason why small
towns
 can be called great, in my opinion, is comfort. In
such
 places, everything is within walking distance and within reach.
Hence
, residents don't need to worry about traffic jams or getting late to work. Take,
for example
, the hospital - in massive
cities
, the transportation in vital situations might take up an hour, whereas in villages and
towns
 medical institutions are reachable in some minutes.
Furthermore
, the surroundings are calmer and give a more relaxing atmosphere than in densely populated
cities
.
On the other hand
, big
cities
 are thought to be great because of the range of
activities
. The idiom "the city never sleeps" gives a good example -
activities
 in densely populated
cities
 vary from dancing classes to nightclubs and are never-ending.
Moreover
, a massive amount of people living in
such
 an area require many institutions from hospitals to governments, that are possible to reach easier than from the countryside. It gives not only comfort
,
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 but
also
 more possibilities - and working is one of them.
Thus
, while understanding the arguments to suggest that small
towns
 might
also
 be great, because of my personal characteristic and experiences I tend to give
this
 name only to densely populated
cities
. I would die of boredom were I to live in a calm place without a variety of
activities
. To conclude, both types of places to live have their pros and cons.
Cities
,
towns
 and villages in the countryside are calmer and more comfortable, whereas densely populated areas have a bigger variety of
activities
 and possibilities. Notwithstanding, I find big
cities
 better for me.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Confound
  • Populous
  • Cultural heritage
  • Urban design
  • Sustainability
  • Quality of life
  • Efficient governance
  • Overcrowding
  • Infrastructure
  • Urban sprawl
  • Economic growth
  • Cosmopolitan
  • Public services
  • Metropolis
  • Urban planning
  • Environmental footprint
  • Inclusivity
  • Civic amenities
  • Heritage conservation
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