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What are the possible advantages and drawbacks of being a professional athlete?

There are many
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athletes
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athletes
 around the world. But, only some of them become professionals. Being a professional
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athlete
 has advantages and
drawbacks
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 which I will discuss
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in
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 paper. There are two advantages for a professional
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athlet
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. The
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one
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 is earning a
lot
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 of money. When athletes become professionals, they participate in different global competitions. These competitions are at high levels. Their
prizes
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 are expensive and valuable.
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,
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professional
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athletes
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 can earn a
lot
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 of money with every win. The
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one
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 is helping people to have a healthy life. We know that exercise is nesseasery to have a healthy body. When someone is a professional in a particular sport, it means she/he has a
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 of knowledge and experience about it.
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,
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athlete
 can use them and teach common people to have a healthy life.
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, being a professional
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athlet
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athlete
 has some
drawbacks
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, too.
One
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 of them is using a special diet.
The professional
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athletes
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 should always have a kind of diet according to their sport if they want to achieve the highest ranks. they must be under the supervision of nutritionists during their sports period. So, they can't eat whatever they like. The
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one
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 is having hard exercises. The professional
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athletes
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 have to practice in difficult conditions to reach the nesseasery physical fitness. Their workouts sometimes
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 hours. Because of all the above, it's very hard to
being
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 a professional
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athlet
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athlete
that
. In summary, being a professional
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athlet
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athlete
that
 has many benefits and
drawbacks
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. The benefits of it are earning a
lot
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 of money and helping ordinary people to
living
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 healthy. The
drawbacks
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 of it are having
special
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a special
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 diet and difficult exercises

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