Some children receive almost no encouragement from their parents regarding their performance at school while other children receive too much pressure from their over enthusiastic parents which can have a negative impact on the child. Why do you think some parents put too much pressure on their children to perform well at school? What do you think a role of a parent should be in their child education. Write at least 250 words.

Some youngsters get little
motivations
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motivation
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from their
parents
as regards their academic performance at
school
, whereas some
children
are pressurized a lot
from
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by
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their eager
parents
which could influence those
children's
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children
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negatively. I believe that reason why
parents
force their kids to perform better at
school
is for them to have a great
career
in the
future
. The following essay would expatiate on the reason for
parents
to pressure their
child
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children
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and
also
their responsibilities
on
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for
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their
education
.
To begin
with, one of the reasons why both fathers and mothers force their
child
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children
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to have
a
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apply
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good grades at
school
,
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is because they are building up their
career
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careers
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in the
future
. When a child has
a
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apply
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good grades at
school
due to their parent's influence, they would pass out with an excellent result or the best overall student in their
school
,
this
gives them higher chances of getting employed
to
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in
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one of the best company in the world.
In addition
,
parents
nowadays put pressure on their
children
to show off
is
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as
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the most intelligent student among other co-
parents
.
This
could lead to
negative
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the negative
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impact
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impacts
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such
as jealousy among students,
however
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,however
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in terms of other
parents
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,parents
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it gives them the impression that other people in the society would respect them more. To exemplify,
A
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apply
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research conducted on
parents
in Nigeria year 2018, shows that 80% of
parents
that
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apply
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their
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whose
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parents
force them
study
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to study
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were all successful in their
career
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careers
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.
Nevertheless
, some of the responsibilities of
parents
in their
children
's
education
are to assist and motivate them in their homework and
also
guide
them to choose a better
career
.
Parents
assisting their
children
with their
assignment
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assignments
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would let them know how intelligent they are.
This
allows the
parents
to know if they need extra help with their
education
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educational
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performance and
also
make
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makes
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them confide in them pertaining
their
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to their
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education
. More so,
parents
guide
them to choose a better course in the university.
This
result
into
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in
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them a good and
well paying
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well-paying
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job in the
future
, thereby reducing levels of dependency on their
parents
later in life.
For instance
, a lot of
parents
guide
their
children
to choose
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health-related
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health related
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health-related
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courses because it has a lot of job opportunities in the world. In conclusion, why some
parents
pressure their youngsters on their academic performance
is
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apply
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because of them having
a great job opportunities
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great job opportunities
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in the
future
and
also
most
parent
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parents
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play some significant roles for their
children
to excel in
school
,
such
as assisting
in
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with
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their homework and
guide
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guiding
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them to the right
career
pathway.
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