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Some people think that studying from the past teaches us nothing about today’s life. Others argue that the history is a value source of information. Discuss both views and give your opinion

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Many individuals these days have differing ideas as regards
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previous education, so one side says that it is important to know about our ancestral methods and thoughts, whereas the other sides argue that it is useless things to learn and progress on
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 daily basis span.
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, it is completely accepted that having
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precise knowledge about
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past paves the way to being taught to solve problems in the same way in a certain context. According to a group of
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 who believe that the ancient sources are not a big deal with their current lifestyle. They would have considered accurate fields like math, physics, biology, as well as chemistry must be known by people.
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, they could be concerned about learning past and archaeology is effortless somehow. Because when community learn math, they think that it comes in handy some part of the life,
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some societies past could be likely to read a story about someone or something that never happened in the past.
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, other people, including me support the idea that in order to be able to understand our recent situation we should have known about the lifespan of yesteryears. It is more important than being a precise learner.
Therefore
, whether people are more educated about history,
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 they will not suffer to find a solution when they are faced with obstacles.
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, all the technical and environmental science have a past version, they have to know about their history because of having a good perspective. To sum up, even if the education of history, makes some communities dull, we will have to use all the information from the past.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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