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Many people are worried about cyber crime and identity theft. What kinds of problems is it causing? What can be done to solve this problem?

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Although
 technology provides numerous opportunities to humanity, there are a number of
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 caused by it. In fact, many humans apprehensive about protecting their
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personal
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knowledges
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 like
identity
 theft. There are
two
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 to
this
 trouble and
also
two
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discussed
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advice
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. On the one hand,
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internet
 from many people who
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come from all the stratum of society enable to reached
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 information of mentioned citizens by theifs due to
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ignorance
 of these humans.
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standart
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standard
 worker who is using
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the internet
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 and
do
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 not consider any danger of
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the internet
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 might be exposed to an
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attack
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attack
 via computer in order to steal
him
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identity
.
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 is mostly
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 by youngsters and it causes
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 through
internet
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.
For instance
, a young man who
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interested
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interested
 in
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online
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online
 games may
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 a credit card
swendler
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swindler
swindlers
.
Therefore
,
main
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 complication of
identity
 theft
caused
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is caused
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lack
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 of
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awareness
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,
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To begin
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situation
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situation
. There is no doubt that any society can
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 to oppose
the
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cyber
crimes
 by
government
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. To illustrate, many older people can be
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announcement
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announcements
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 on tv or newspaper and radio about
this
 kind of
crimes
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.
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an adolescent
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adolescent
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 much more possibility to encounter mentioned
crimes
 can be designed a lesson involves some warnings about social media. To conclude, cyber
crimes
 and
identity
 theft
caused
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are caused
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 by
two
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which
why
whic
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which
 are
lack
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a lack
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 of
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sufficient
sufficent
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sufficient
 information about
internet
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the internet
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 and
age
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average
avarage
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average
. To solve mentioned problems society can be educated especially young people and old humans
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against
agaisnt
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against
 cyber
crimes
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • cyber crime
  • identity theft
  • hackers
  • data breach
  • phishing
  • online scams
  • vulnerable
  • sensitive information
  • financial transactions
  • online privacy
  • digital footprint
  • cybersecurity
  • online security
  • awareness campaigns
  • legislation
  • enforcement
  • collaboration
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