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A child how he grows up depends on how they were brought up by their parents. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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A child's upbringing is mainly related to how they were treated and brought up by their
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. I agree with it and I will present the reasons for my choice in
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 essay. On the one hand, an individual's childhood plays an essential role throughout their life as it is the time to build their character and develop personality, attitudes and behaviours.
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, I, myself, was a child who grow up and spend most of my time without my
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, which
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 resulted in building a shy character in me who does not really know how to interact with people properly.
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, some personalities are established inside us which later on, can become a difficult trait to eradicate and might stay with us over the
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 years.
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, there is a widely held view among a majority of individuals that
parents
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 are everyone's
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 role model or even the only one.
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 of that, kids show a tendency toward taking after their elders, especially by how they were treated by them.
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, those kids who witness the bad attitudes of their mother or father are often grown up to become aggressive
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. Another example that we can mention is
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 what kind of life lessons the young ones learned from them
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 as, how to behave and talk to other people especially elders or learn how to consult a person, how to be generous, how to be strong and even stand for themselves and so on. These are some good things that we need to be taught when we are an adult. So to put everything in a nutshell,
parents
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 are the most significant part of a human's life and we all wish to have great ones who will support us now and again and
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, teach us the lifelong skills that we need to adopt at a young age.
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 will lead to turning that child into a future amazing parent who will act accurately to their own baby.
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