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you will go to a foreign country to stay there for one year, and you need a place to live in. You have decided to write to an agency for accommodation. Write a letter to the agency to get information about accommodation. In your letter, say: why you are going to this country what kind of accommodation you want when you will arrive

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Dear Sir, I am writing
this
 letter with
regards
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 to
find
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finding
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a
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apply
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suitable accommodation
according to
 my needs in Abbotsford, Canada for one year. I have
taken
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been
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admission
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in
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to
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University
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the University
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 of Fraser Valley, Abbotsford, BC, Canada.
That is
 why, I am looking for a place to stay near my university. I am afraid to tell you that I have several requirements for accommodation.
First,
I cannot live in sharing because I am vegetarian.
As most
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of
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Canadians eat meat.
Second,
I
prefre
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prefer
single
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a single
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 bedroom apartment over a room in
basement
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the basement
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 because I feel suffocated in
basement
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the basement
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.
Third,
I have a dog too, who is going to come
along with
 me.
Therefore
, it has to be
pet friendly
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pet-friendly
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.
Lastly
, you must want to know about my arrival in Canada, which would be August 25th, 2024.
However
, I am going to stay with my relatives till August 31st and I will be ready to move into
new
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a new
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 place on 1st of September. Please let me know if you need any
further
 information.
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Yours
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Your
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Yours
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 faithfully,
Samandeep
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Sandeep
 Kaur
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Grammar
There are a few grammatical errors and awkward phrases such as 'I have taken admission' which could be improved to 'I have been admitted' or 'I have enrolled in'.
Clarity
Consider refining phrases like 'I prefre single bedroom apartment over a room in basement' to 'I prefer a single bedroom apartment rather than a basement room'.
Structure
Your letter has a clear structure and each paragraph addresses a specific point, making it easy for the reader to follow.
Tone
The tone of your letter is suitable and respectful, and you have provided all the necessary details.
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