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In some countries, there has been an increase in the number of parents who educate their children themselves at home instead of sending them to school. Do the advantages of home education outweigh disadvantages?

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Homeschooling is eminent among folks these days. Self-education provided by
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 them to not
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 their offspring to school and
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 issue has been trending in certain countries.
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 essay will highlight why homeschooling has more drawbacks for
children
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 rather than
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benefits. To commence with, self-education will promote a sedentary lifestyle
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children
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. As a consequence, it will be hard to absorb all the inputs during the learning process,
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, only 15% of the information is completely received by the brain if a person just self-study at home according to some research in Indonesia.
Children
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 today seem to have an intuitive understanding by just hands-on practicals which
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 not available in the homeschooling method.
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,
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 cannot turn a blind eye to
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 matter as it is not crucial at all.
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,
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 kind of education style will create in-person social disconnects.
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,
children
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 will endure fewer interactions with others, and
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, it can lead them to become antisocial types of people. Recent research by "The Times", approximately 25% of school-aged
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 experience difficulty making a friend at school due to a lack of communication skills.
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, home education will able the
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 to supervise and restrict their
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children
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 activities from time to time. Despite
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, it just poses a minor threat to the advantages. In conclusion,
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 homeschooling allows
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 to supervise their
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 regularly, it will create a social barrier, as well as promote an inactive lifestyle in
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.
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, I reckon that the disadvantages outweigh the advantages.
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