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Some people prefer to live in a house, while others feel that there are more advantages to living in an apartment. Are there more advantages than disavdantages to living in a house compared with living in an apartment?

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Demand for houses has increased over the past few decades. Some people believe, that living in an apartment has many benefits,
However
, I think, Housing advantages outweigh the disadvantages in terms of owning land. One of the great benefits of having a
house
 is to have your own land where you can change your interior plans
according to
 family preferences.
For example
, having children in a
single bedroom
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 home is difficult to live in, you can change the interior from one to two or more bedrooms later is not a big deal.
Furthermore
, having get
together
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 is not a problem here, no need to have management's permission or think about your neighbour's disturbance and complaints. Clearly, having private space is the key advantage of a
house
.
On the other hand
, living in a
house
 is not a budget-friendly option anymore. Owning a
house
 is one thing but maintaining it is very difficult.
Due to
 personal security, caretakers and high taxes, the cost of living in a villa has increased over the past few years.
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, you are responsible for not only inside but outside maintenance as well, from parking to the backyard you have to pay for the maintenance which is sometimes very expensive.
To conclude
, I believe,
house
 maintenance can be expensive,
however
, apartments can not beat it in terms of lifestyle and comfort. With some extra
efforts
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, you can live a happy life without worrying
of
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 space for other members of the family.
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coherence cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph has a clear main idea and fully develops it. For instance, the argument about house maintenance could be expanded by offering more detailed examples or comparisons to apartment living.
coherence cohesion
Review grammatical structures and sentence variety to make the essay flow more smoothly. For example, avoid using many similarly structured sentences back-to-back, and make sure your pronouns and subjects are clear.
task response
Make sure each argument is logically presented and elaborated on to show clear comprehensive ideas. For instance, delve deeper into why private space in a house is a significant advantage and how it impacts quality of life.
task response
The essay clearly outlines the main points both for and against living in a house versus an apartment.
coherence cohesion
The introduction sets up the topic well and the conclusion summarises the writer's stance effectively.
coherence cohesion
Provides relevant and specific examples to support the arguments, such as the flexibility of changing the interior layout.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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