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Some people believe that university should offer places for people with high marks, Others says that universities accept all age of people even if they do not well at schools. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion

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There has been a controversy about whether
universities
 should be lenient with applicants and accept people even if they can't meet the requirement. I think
universities
 are designed for capable people, and my reasons will be explained in the following paragraphs.
First
, your grades can reflect your ability to a large extent. It's expected that the purpose of setting up
universities
 is to cultivate human resources for the country's needs.
Therefore
, there must be a strict standard to select qualified
students
 who can make contributions to the country's improvement. At
this
 point, if the requirement is low and lenient, it can end up that
students
 are unable to take responsibility for developing the country and waste all the resources.
Hence
, in order to fulfil
this
 arduous challenge,
universities
 should choose
students
 who have at least enough marks.
Second
, to balance out the job market's needs. It's commonplace that everyone wants to work in the office comfortably and let others do the dirty work.
However
, if all people want to be office workers,
then
 there will be worker shortages in other industries. Take China as an example. The number of university
students
 outweighs the needs of the job market in China now;
such
 a situation results in an unsatisfied salary and a worsened unemployment rate. In
this
 case,
students
 with lower points can go some places,
such
 as technical schools, to learn some professional skills and engage in those occupations in the future.
On the other hand
,
universities
 can give those
students
 a chance as well.
For instance
, there are
students
 who are good at math, but bad at language subjects. In
this
 case, their total marks might be low on account of their special talents.
Therefore
, if
universities
 can give these
students
 an opportunity, they might make some outstanding achievements. In conclusion, I believe it's necessary for
universities
 to have a rigorous standard in selecting
students
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • meritocracy
  • academic excellence
  • rigors of university education
  • inclusive
  • lifelong learning
  • diversity
  • workforce skills
  • practical experience
  • enrich
  • holistic admissions approach
  • extracurricular activities
  • personal statements
  • well-rounded student selection
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