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Some people believe that social media sites, such as Facebook or Twitter, have a negative impact on young people and their ability to form personal relationships. Others believe that these sites bring people together in a beneficial way.

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Technology
 is indeed one of the essential things in our
life
 right now. Every day we utilize
technology
, from electricity, mobile phone, television, computer, internet, etc. Social
media
 is one of them. Because
technology
 development is growing extensively, including social
media
, we can connect with our friends, family, or other
people
 who live far from us in other areas, cities, and even other countries.
Technology
 makes
people
 who are far become closer and gives us access without limit. It is a positive thing.
However
, there are no
such
 things as perfection. Not only advantages but
also
 social
media
 have disadvantages. One of the social
media
 disadvantages is it can make
people
 who can not hold themself become addicted to it. Some
people
 can not restrain themself from scrolling through social
media
 to see others’
life
 updates or finding engaging information about celebrities, movies, hobbies, or anything that can satisfy them or answer their curiosity.
This
 can happens to adults, young
people
, and even
children
.
Children
 must not
use
 social
media
 freely. They need supervision from their parents for using social
media
. If parents do not oversee how their
children
use
 social
media
, it can affect the social
life
 of
children
, even their entire
life
. Parents must teach and guide their
children
 on how to
use
 social
media
 properly and not overuse it. If
people
 are already addicted to social
media
, they will face difficulty forming actual relationships with other
people
.
Therefore
 we have to
use
 social
media
 carefully and wisely.
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