Some people believe that money is more important than free time for a good quality of life. Others say the opposite is true. Discuss both views. What is more important in your opinion? Give relevant examples.

There is a popular belief
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several people adhere
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that discusses [a]the supremacy of
money
over other aspects that symbolizes contentment. From my perspective, each and every human being should learn the importance of balancing these two aspects in
life
.
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as well as supporting reasons on how balancing these two aspects
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can improve
one
's welfare.
Money
is indeed a crucial factor that contributes to an individual's
fulfillment
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,
however
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spending quality
time
in
life
through various activities 
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 [b]often overlooked by not only those proponents who attach t[c][d]
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happiness with
money
. Cash is an essential asset used to trade for food, water, rent, house, furniture, education, entertainment, etc.
Moreover
, the more valued
one
's properties are, the more they feel empowered.
Thus
,
this
makes
laborers
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slavishly worship the fortune's tormenting potency that it seemingly introduces.
In addition
, there is
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prevalent disbelief existing within mortals stating that if
one
possesses
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value of
money
, they shall possess any other ordinary objects. All of these add to the fact that they often neglect
spending
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actual quality
time
performing acts which they would rather enjoy.
However
, from a modern standpoint, to achieve the utmost satisfaction in
life
,
one
must be financially stable, not only must
one
be capable of self-nourishment but
also
have the ability
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provision. Having an adequate budget will certainly provide
one
with basic needs in
life
. Regardless of how wealth can supply our desiderata, experience is what truly forms gratification.
In other words
, genuine happiness derives from the way we allocate free
time
in order to achieve self-actualization.
For instance
, we may handle those available occasions with loved ones or implement amusing exercises. In conclusion, to obtain self-realization and pleasure,
one
must balance
between
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wealth and the events
in
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their
time
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.
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