We are surrounded by all kinds of advertising, which significantly influence our lives. Do the positive effects of advertising outweigh its negative effects?

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Nowadays, we are living in
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world prevalent with various
advertisements
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, which significantly influence our lives.
People
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of all ages are affected by advertising.
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, I think that the negative
effects
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of advertising outweigh its positive
effects
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.
To begin
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with, with television or online advertising,
people
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can get easy access to multiple goods.
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,
people
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can find about the most updated
computer
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through advertising. They can
then
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compare
between
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the
advertisements
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and choose the most suitable
computer
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.
The advertising
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Advertising
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makes shopping more conveniently and efficiently, as
people
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can gain enough information on
products
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without going to different stores. Granted that advertising allows
people
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get
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more information about the latest
products
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,
people
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still lose money and time making insensible purchases.
For example
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, some TV advertising on
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or perfumes targets female customers, and
people
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will be informed that these
products
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will make them more glorious or attractive.
People
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will have
impusivle
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impulsive
shopping and
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waste a large amount of money.
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, the elderly
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also
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the target for commercial advertising on
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health
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food. The company may exaggerate the effect of these
products
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on promoting
health
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. Lured by the advertising, old
people
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will spend thousands buying so-called
health
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supplements. These
products
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might cause
adverse
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an adverse
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effect
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effects
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on
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old
people
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,
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when they choose not to seek medical care and rely only on
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health
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food.
Children
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are
also
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easily influenced by
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advertising. The
advertisements
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of
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for
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computer
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games
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are extremely attractive. School
children
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will beg their parents to purchase
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computer
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games
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, and some
children
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will become addicted to the
games
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and will get poor marks in school work. Some parents insist
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on not
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to buy
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games
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for their
children
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, who will become very unhappy especially when most of their peers are discussing
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the
games
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in
the
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school.
Children
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will have
intense
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an intense
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relationship
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relationships
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with their parents.
In addition
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, some
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advertisements
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might advocate and promote dangerous
behavior
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behaviour
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including reckless driving and alcohol to attract more potential customers.
Adolenscents
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Adolescents
might be lured to the pub and even try drugs. Young teenagers might become drug addicts and break the laws to satisfy their needs. These
advertisements
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might affect
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young
people
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both physically and psychologically. In conclusion,
although
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advertising can provide more information on the
products
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for
people
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, the negative
effects
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outweigh the positive
effects
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in the case of costing
people
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money to make impulsive purchases and lure
children
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to drugs or alcohol.
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