With the improvement of health system, society should care of their elderly people. Do you feel that society can cope in the increasing number of elderly people and how can it be managed?
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care
system is become
debatable with its progressive improvements. Change to the active voice
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has become
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The community
care
a
big number of elderly Change preposition
for a
people
, with the rise of health
sector. Add an article
the health
Although
the number of elder people
is increasing day by day, I think that society
can easily handle it and it can be managed by taking necessary
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the necessary
step
.
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steps
To begin
with, people
will be capable to cope up
with old Change preposition
apply
people
if they acknowledge their responsibilities. Every people
who is
young now has to be Change the verb form
are
old
turned old citizen at one day. So, they are Add an article
an old
the
part of our culture. Correct article usage
a
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The youngster
A youngster
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should have to aware Fix the agreement mistake
Youngsters
about
their concern Change preposition
of
to
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with
elderly
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the elderly
community
and know how to treat with
themChange preposition
apply
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, as a result,
as a result
they will become understand
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understandable
to
their liability which may help to take Change preposition
of
care
of old pupil
. Fix the agreement mistake
pupils
For example
, when a person know Add an article
the concern
concern
about their duties, they will try to cover Wrong verb form
concerned
it
resulting in the work will be accomplished. Correct pronoun usage
them
Hence
, when young
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the young
a young
community
of society
will maintain their responsibility, the number of old people
can coped
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cope
up by
them easily.
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apply
However
, nowadays a common topic is how it will be maintained?
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Society
can manage to take care
of old people
by spending time with them. In addition
, by keeping a guard for them who take care
of their health. Passing time with Correct your spelling
elderly
older
olderly
persons can make them happy and a medical practitioner can make them healthy by providing accurate Correct your spelling
elderly
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treatment
treatement
. Correct your spelling
treatment
For instance
, when two people
spend time together, they forget their all stress of life and by Correct your spelling
grasping
gossiping
grassiping
they enjoy Add a comma
,grassiping
this
moment. Moreover
, a nurse can know how to about his duty to how can make a
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apply
people
healthy. Therefore
, taking care
of old pupil
can be managed easily by giving some necessary steps.
In conclusion, older Fix the agreement mistake
pupils
people
an inseparable part of our society
. So, young
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the young
community
of society
should take care
of them by taking help to advocate healthcare
. And I think Change preposition
for healthcare
people
can done
it easilyChange the verb form
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