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Some people believe that nowadays we have too many choices. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#people #choices
Today many
people
 believe that we have excessive
choices
 in life. In my opinion, I strongly agree with
this
 statement because of the development of
technology
 and the trend for a better lifestyle than before
people
 get many
choices
 on demand.
To begin
 with,
technology
 is a key to success to a great extent in the modern lifestyle. To illustrate, the smartphone which
people
 tend to bring every time since they find it very useful helps
people
 widen their knowledge and news on the Internet faster than the conventional way. Plus, it is convenient for
people
 to develop the applications
such
 as online malls, mobile banking, and so on to save valuable time.
Therefore
, more and more expedient applications appear to satisfy the need of busy
people
 like businessmen.
Moreover
,
technology
also
 supports humans to manage their time properly and not be time-consuming.
On the other hand
,
although
people
 have many
choices
 thanks to
technology
, it is easy for
people
 to be at risk of revealing personal information to a bad hacker. So it is inevitable that
people
 should make the decision carefully and take the precaution of meticulous ruse online crime.
Nevertheless
, it helps
people
 gain more benefits than limitations.
For instance
, farmers with the help of modern farming machines are out of stress and quicker than handmade. In conclusion, I personally believe that having more
choices
 is good for
people
's lifestyle since we have many kinds of methods to solve problems due to the development of
technology
 and have a better life.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • overwhelmed
  • decision fatigue
  • paralysis by analysis
  • consumerism
  • globalization
  • personal autonomy
  • market saturation
  • option overload
  • decision-making process
  • psychological well-being
  • buyer's remorse
  • customization
  • trade-offs
  • minimalism
  • information superhighway
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