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Some think that children should start school as early as possible, while others believe that they should start school at the age of seven. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Education is the key to the future so some people say that
children
 must start learning as early as possible. While others think that they should start school at the youth of
seven
.
This
 essay will discuss both views and provide examples.
first
 of all, A
lot
 of folks think that young people should begin studying as early as possible. there are some country has traditions that the baby
start
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 nursing from one year old.
for example
, in Denmark small
baby
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babies
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 start to go to nurses
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to
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be involved with
community
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the community
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an
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 early
age
. they meet a
lot
 of
children
 like they
age
 and learn how to speak early and play a
lot
.
On the other hand
, others believe that they should start school at the
age
 of
seven
. a
lot
 of families like to
rise
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 their own
children
 by themself, teaching them and playing with them. they have
the
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full time to stay with the baby and they believe they must start from the
age
 of
seven
.
for instance
, some countries have rules like the mother to stay home and take care of the
children
. those mothers have full-time jobs at home doing homework like cleaning, cooking and taking care of the
children
. to conclude, it is best for
children
 to have an education from the 0
age
. As some people think it is best for
children
 to start school as early as possible. while others believe it is best to start from
age
seven
. In my opinion, as long as the
children
 start from an early
age
 it is best for them to learn fast and be
social
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 person in the future.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Cognitive development
  • Social skills
  • Competitive advantage
  • Extended childhood
  • Educational system
  • Developmental stages
  • Psychological readiness
  • Curriculum
  • Peer interaction
  • Childhood development
  • Learning environment
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