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Some people believe that nowadays we have too many choices. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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In some
people
's opinions, we are facing too many
choices
 in our daily
life
. I totally agree with
this
 idea. Thanks to globalization and social-economic development, we could get access to more kinds of resources related to every aspect of
life
 than ever.
Therefore
, we have to make decisions about which one to choose. Some of the
choices
 are about our daily
life
,
such
 as to eat Beijing Roasted Duck or KFC; to drink Coca or Pepsi or buy clothes from which store.
Besides
, some other
choices
 may be concerned with the direction of one's
life
.
For instance
, a high school graduate may face the
choices
 of whether to study at home or abroad, to major in physics or literature and to go to which university. Every step of the
life
-deciding choice is vital. So many
choices
 have various effects on us. On the one hand, they provide
people
 with many conveniences. Everyone can find a commodity with a suitable function and price, and
thus
 their
life
 quality is improved.
On the other hand
,
choices
 mean burdens for some
people
. Sometimes it is hard to figure out which product to choose and a large amount of time and energy would be wasted at
last
. Facing the big decisions that may change their
life
,
people
 may feel hesitant. Even if they
finally
 make a decision, they may regret it later. In conclusion, I agree that we are facing too many
choices
 nowadays. While they bring us some convenience, sometimes it just makes our
life
 become more suffering.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • overwhelmed
  • decision fatigue
  • paralysis by analysis
  • consumerism
  • globalization
  • personal autonomy
  • market saturation
  • option overload
  • decision-making process
  • psychological well-being
  • buyer's remorse
  • customization
  • trade-offs
  • minimalism
  • information superhighway
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