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The two maps below show an island, before and after the construction of some tourist facilities. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features,and make comparisons where relevant

The two maps below show an island, before and after the construction of some tourist facilities. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features,and make comparisons where relevant
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The map depicts an
island
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 before and after the development for
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tourist
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tourists
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 being created to facilitate the
tourist
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.The changes on
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island
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the island
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shows
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 the development for
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tourist
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tourists
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such
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 as accommodation, swimming, restaurant and pier for boats etc.And these changes have been created without affecting the natural resources that much. Before the facilities have been constructed, there are plants trees and
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beach
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a beach
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 on the
island
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.Many
of
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places
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the places
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 on the
island
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 are empty. The development to facilitate
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tourist
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 is accommodation facilities,
restaurant
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restaurants
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, reception, swimming on
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beach
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the beach
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,
pier
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a pier
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 for boating and so on. Interestingly, those
tourist
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 facility created without cutting down the plants and trees on the
island
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.
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, most of the construction
were
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 made near the
beach
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.
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, the footpaths and
the
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apply
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roads are created
to
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for
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commuting
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 to facilitate
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tourist
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. The footpaths are made for
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a walk
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walk
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walking
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 to reach residing area,
swimming
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and swimming
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 on
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beach
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the beach
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 .And the
roads
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road
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 tracks are created for
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the vehicle
a vehicle
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vehicle
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vehicles
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 to reach
at
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apply
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restaurant
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restaurants
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, reception and pier for boating. In summary,these facilities were made for tourists
visit
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to visit
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stay
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to stay
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at
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on
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island
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the island
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 for enjoyment without cutting the trees and plants.
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words island, tourist, beach with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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