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Some people feel that equality between the genders has already been achieved while others feel there is considerable progress to be made. Discuss both views and give your own opinion

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Women
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 say that men and
women
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 should be treated equally so we can attain gender equality In terms of the law,
females
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 are now equal to males. They can vote in elections and stand for political office. In the early twentieth century,
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 was not the case and
women
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 had to fight for the right to cast their vote in elections.
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,
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 have the same rights to own property as men.
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 was
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 not the case in the past.
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,
females
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 suffer from indirect discrimination in many other ways. Statistically,
females
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 are still paid less on average than males.
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 laws have been put in place to ensure equality of pay for the same job, men continue to dominate management positions while
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 are assigned administrative and support roles. Their average salary is lower
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.
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, the burden of childcare falls more heavily on the mother than the father. Many companies are reluctant to female employees in their late twenties and early thirties for fear of the
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 becoming pregnant and placing the burden of paying maternity care on the shoulders of the company.
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 is something
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 quantifiable and very difficult to expose.
Females
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 have the same right to a career and to progress in that career as their male counterparts, but they are being denied
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 opportunity due to hidden discrimination at all levels in our community.
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 the law has changed to uphold
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’s rights, our community will remain unequal until these hidden forms of unfairness disappear, something that would require a sea change in attitudes on behalf of the general public.
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