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The diagrams below show changes in a cinema from 1980 until now. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagrams below show changes in a cinema from 1980 until now. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The maps show the modifications that a cinema has undergone between 1980 and the present.
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, it is evident that as technology advances, movie screens grow and more stores are constructed. In 1980, there were only two cinemas in the complicated, the first of which was located directly to the left of the entrance and the
second
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 on the relatively empty right side. The toilets for men and women were located
next
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 to
theater
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theatre
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 2. Tickets were located on the entry's right side,
while
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 refreshments were located nearby.
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, the carpark
on
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 the top of
map
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the map
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. The inclusion of amenities that address the diverse demands of moviegoers is one of the other significant developments. In place of Cinema 1, there is now a location where food and drink are offered,
along with
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a
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space for relaxing. New
theaters
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theatres
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 3, 4, and 5 have been erected on the right side of the entrance. The ticket booth remains the same
while
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 the drinks room to the southeast is transformed into a DVD shop.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "show" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 2 times.
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