In recent years, the family structure has changed, as well as family roles. What are the changes. What are the changes that have occurred? Do you think these changes are positive or negative?

Nowadays, it is becoming increasingly common that more
people
have connotations in structure or even support for the
role
of members in a family. In my opinion, I believe it may have positive effects for some reason. The
first
reason why I believe
that is
gender equality. It can be seen that at the moment,
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so the matter many
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women go to work
instead
of staying at home to be
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housework.
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previous families before, only men went to work and women stayed at home to do housework and take care of the children.
However
, the
role
in the family has changed, both wife and husband working together,
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opportunities are available for
people
of both sexes, leading to the fact that both men and women should exert effort to make ends meet.
For instance
,
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lady of the USA Hillary Clinton, a woman who was born in the era still has many privileges and iniquities about sexes, but she left many things outside and went straight to his career path.
As a result
, she graduated from the top University in the world, became
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first
lady and
also
was a former U.S secretary of state. The social development led to the
role
of members in the family
also
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. Another reason why I believe
this
tendency is beneficial is that many extended families turn into nuclear families.
In particular
, Asia, which continent has rich cultures and traditions about love and unity of
people
to
people
. And that
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Asian connected with extended family, since
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century to now, the development of many large countries cause the mindset and lifestyle have been changed. A good example of it, many generations nowadays are more and more occupied with their work and they
also
have fewer children than their forefathers or in other
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people
decided to live alone
instead
of having
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.
In addition
, many adolescents want to live independently to try and face many challenges or simply that need to have a private space for their living.
Furthermore
, many young
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seem to be much respected and considered as an integral part by adults. To conclude, I opine that the model of a new type of family and
role
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been changed is a great development, due to the fact that many gender equality and privilege have been connotated.
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  • Family structure
  • Modern family
  • Extended family
  • Nuclear family
  • Same-sex parent families
  • Breadwinner
  • Caregiving responsibilities
  • Family dynamics
  • Globalization
  • Economic shifts
  • Migration
  • Child-free lifestyles
  • Cohabitation
  • Traditional marriage
  • Perceptions
  • Homemaker
  • Communication
  • Shared activities
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