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People should be responsible for the pollution problems caused by transportation, while others think govt should be responsible. Discuss both sides and give opinion.

#people #pollution #transportation #govt
Two schemas illustrate the improvement of the
museum
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pictire
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, that the most of
museum
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exhibition
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exhibition
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 same places. On the plan of
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1998
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 more than half of the building belongs to
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museum
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 the upgrading of the garden, which takes place exactly in the middle of the
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fountains
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, in the newest plan the left corner of the
museum
 , where in the year 1998 the exhibition's room could be found, belongs to a restaurant.
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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • pollution problems
  • transportation
  • responsible
  • individuals
  • government
  • contribute
  • reduce
  • policies
  • regulations
  • environmentally friendly
  • invest
  • infrastructure
  • greener
  • carbon footprint
  • implement
  • taxes
  • incentives
  • sustainable
  • responsibility
  • shared
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