At the present time, the population of some countries includes a relatively large number of young adults, compared with the number of older people. Do the advantages of this situation outweigh the disadvantages?

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It is true that the crowd of the young adult is larger than that of the older in the current

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of some countries. In my opinion,

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situation will benefit their societies in certain

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years, it may

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make the

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enter the stage of

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ageing in the near

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, so the disadvantages outweigh the advantages overall.

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with, it seems to me that two are three main advantages of

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phenomenon. On the one hand, the more young

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the

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has, the more productive it will be. Because it is the young adult crowd

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the source of social productivity.

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, the less elder

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means that the social assurance system has less stress. Government don't need many social sources to support their retired life.

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, the large young adult

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will become the large elder

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very soon. If the young

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of the

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also

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smaller than that of young

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. That means in the

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the number of young

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will be less than that of the elder. At that time, the social assurance system will have huge stress. Government should take measures to ensure that the number of young people is more than that of young

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, it will be hard to develop our

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in the

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. It is obvious that encouraging bearing is easier than solving the

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ageing problem according to my knowledge. That's why I think the disadvantages of the situation outweigh the advantages. In conclusion, when we judge a social phenomenon, we must consider its

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influence, so I insist that

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situation will bring more negative impact due to its huge harm in the

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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

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At the present time, the population of some countries includes a relatively large number of young adults, compared with the number of older people. Do the advantages of this situation outweigh the disadvantages?

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

It is sad that life is becoming increasingly stressful for most people. What is the reason of this phenomenon and how could this problem be solved?

Some people think young people should be required to have full time education until they are at least 18 years old. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Some people think it is more important to spend money on roads and motorways than on public transport systems such as railways and trams. To what extent do you agree or disagee?

45.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

Some people say that advertising is extremely successful at persuading us to buy things. Other people think that advertising is so common that we no longer pay attention to it. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.