Write a letter to accommodation officer at the college to describe your situation, your problems when you are sharing room with another student, say what kind of accommodation you would prefer
Dear Sir,
I'
m
writing this
letter to inform you about the difficulties I'm
facing in the current accommodation, and also
requesting you to change my room.
I'm
a 3rd year
Biology student, sharing the on-campus space in Block 1, Room no. 26 with 1st year Music students. In the Add a hyphen
3rd-year
last
two years, I always got a living space with my classmates which was helpful for me to study together, and shared any concerns relating to our studies
with my colleagues. But this
time, I think some mistake has been made while
assigning the rooms.
Sir, I'm
one of the toppers in my college, and in the final year of my studies
, I need to put more effort in
getting excellent marks so that I'll get enrolled in some recognised university for higher Change preposition
into
studies
. All three students are newcomers so they are not mature enough towards their studies
. Also
, their stream is arts and music, so most of their time is spent practicing the musical instruments which is the biggest hurdle in my preparation.
Hoping you are able to understand my situation,
and reassign me to a room with my classmates that would assist me in concentrating on my Remove the comma
apply
studies
in an effective manner.
Looking for your positive response at the earliest.
Yours Faithfully,
Lisha LokaiSubmitted by kanwalkaur05 on
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coherence cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph contains a single clear idea and develop your arguments adequately for a higher coherence and cohesion score. Make use of cohesive devices but avoid overuse.
task achievement
While your letter covers the task requisites, try to substantiate your arguments with more specific examples and a clearer explanation of what 'recognised university' means to enhance task response.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite